Critical Investigation: Learner Response

1. Teacher feedback:
WWW:

• Some references to wider context and the socio-political issues affecting black people.
• Fairly well presented bibliography, although lacking books in works cited needs to be at least 10
• Fairly well structured and written (although the conclusion is weak and needs re-writing)

EBI

• Explain the theories you include (there are lots of them - well done... two step flow model, hypodermic needle model, cultural imperialism, uses and gratification, medhurst, perkins, mulvey) and include a reference to them in the footnotes
• More close textual analysis of how representations are constructed (using media language)
• Consideration of institution - who produces the texts? Are they black?

Student feedback:

WWW:

• Very good use of media terminology and theories 
• Good interpretation of quotes and use of MIGRAIN
• Good use of variety of different theories to support your evidence/info
• Fluent and analytical explanation of topic with good use of critical debates

EBI:

• Embed the theory instead of brackets, punctuation, you need commas
• Expand on some points and include names of theory for extra references
• Mention examples of black history so essay can become stronger
• Include more about media technology and the effect of globalisation on the media

Aiming to get 28-32 marks

Improvements:

• Expand on the textual analysis with the use of media language(MIGRAIN)
• Overall, better use of MIGRAIN in the essay
• Wider context needs to be enhanced with more examples
• More books referenced which means a trip to the BFI
• Conclusion needs to be fixed
• Grammar and punctuation needs to be checked for a fluent flow of writing